1 写作要求
中秋节是我国的传统节日,随着经济的发展和时代的变迁,中秋节依然在我们国人心中有着重要的位置。在中秋节,人们望着天上的明月,守望膜拜,吃着月饼,寄托情怀,这个节日更多地被赋予了思念亲人的色彩,祈求团圆和幸福。过去的中秋节有没有特别让你难忘的事情发生,让你觉得温暖、意义重大?请你写一封信给你的外国朋友Nick介绍一下这个节日,分享一下你的经历,包括:
(1)介绍节日(包括时间、意义、食物、传统活动等)
(2)难忘的经历
(3)其他
2 优秀范文
Dear Nick,
I’d like to tell you something about Mid-Autumn Festival. It is one of the most famous traditional festivals in China. It falls on August 15th of the lunar calendar. People believe that the moon is a symbol of reunion, luck and fortune, so they express best wishes to each other on that day. Mooncakes are the traditional food of this festival. People often get together to have dinner, admire the moon and share mooncakes.
Last year, my parents and I spent the Mid-Autumn Festival at my grandparents’ house. My grandparents told me the story of Chang’e, and we enjoyed the moon together. It was really a wonderful experience.
I hope you can enjoy it.
Yours,
Best friend
3 翻译、句子结构
I’d like to tell you something about Mid-Autumn Festival.
我想告诉你一些关于中秋节的事情。
主语(I),谓语(’d like to tell),宾语(you),宾语(something),状语(about Mid-Autumn Festival)。
It is one of the most famous traditional festivals in China.
它是中国最著名的传统节日之一。
主语(It),谓语(is),表语(one of the most famous traditional festivals),状语(in China)。
It falls on August 15th of the lunar calendar.
它在农历八月十五这一天。
主语(It),谓语(falls on),宾语(August 15th of the lunar calendar)。
People believe that the moon is a symbol of reunion, luck and fortune, so they express best wishes to each other on that day.
人们相信月亮是团圆、好运和财富的象征,因此他们在这一天互相表达最美好的祝愿。
主语(People),谓语(believe),宾语从句(that the moon is a symbol of reunion, luck and fortune);结果状语从句(so they express best wishes to each other on that day)。
从句主语(the moon),谓语(is),表语(a symbol of reunion, luck and fortune);主语(they),谓语(express),宾语(best wishes),状语(to each other on that day)。
Mooncakes are the traditional food of this festival.
月饼是这个节日的传统食品。
主语(Mooncakes),谓语(are),表语(the traditional food),状语(of this festival)。
People often get together to have dinner, admire the moon and share mooncakes.
人们常常聚在一起吃晚餐、赏月和分享月饼。
主语(People),谓语(get together),状语(to have dinner, admire the moon and share mooncakes)。
Last year, my parents and I spent the Mid-Autumn Festival at my grandparents’ house.
去年,我和我的父母在祖父母家度过了中秋节。
状语(Last year),主语(my parents and I),谓语(spent),宾语(the Mid-Autumn Festival),状语(at my grandparents’ house)。
My grandparents told me the story of Chang’e, and we enjoyed the moon together.
我的祖父母给我讲了嫦娥的故事,我们一起赏月。
主语(My grandparents),谓语(told),宾语(me),宾语(the story of Chang’e);主语(we),谓语(enjoyed),宾语(the moon),状语(together)。
It was really a wonderful experience.
那真是一次美妙的经历。
主语(It),谓语(was),表语(a wonderful experience)。
I hope you can enjoy it.
我希望你能喜欢它。
主语(I),谓语(hope),宾语从句(you can enjoy it)。
从句主语(you),谓语(can enjoy),宾语(it)。
4 句子逻辑
第一句是称呼,引出收信人。
第二句表达了写信的目的,即介绍中秋节。
第三句至第六句详细介绍了中秋节的时间、意义和传统习俗。
第七句至第九句描述了作者去年如何度过中秋节,包括家庭聚会和赏月。
第十句表达了作者对收信人的美好祝愿。
5 高分句型
It is one of the most famous traditional festivals in China.(“one of the+形容词最高级+可数名词复数”表示“最……之一”)
6 作文点评
优点
主题明确:文章围绕“中秋节”这一主题展开,主题明确。
内容丰富:详细介绍了中秋节的时间、意义、传统习俗和作者的个人经历,内容丰富。
结构清晰:文章有明确的开头、中间和结尾,逻辑性强。
语言简洁:使用了简洁明了的语言,易于理解。
不足
词汇和句式多样性:虽然文章内容丰富,但可以增加一些高级词汇和复杂句式,以提升文章的表达效果。
深度分析:文章虽然介绍了中秋节的习俗,但缺少对这些习俗背后文化和历史意义的深入探讨。